Kardos: A couple things to fix. First, and tell Jake this two, cause I missed it when checking his sheet, you guys do get bonuses to your saves (Fortitude, Reflex, Will) from your class. You get a +2 to Fortitude and Lariviel (Jake) gets +2s to Fortitude and Reflex. You mark these in the Base section.
Second, you gave your guy Two-Weapon Defense so he should get a +1 AC point where it says shield. That gives him a 17 AC.
Third, your character is ferociously understocked for the journey. I get that that's part of your backstory, but the supplies aren't just for fun, they will come up. I would highly recommend getting at least a bedroll and waterskin.
Fourth, I will admit to not fully knowing the Two-Weapon rules, so maybe another player can help me with this, but I believe you can still add your attack bonus, so, going by this sheet, that puts your attack at -1,-1. If this is not the case, I would recommend swapping out one of your Longswords for a short sword or other light weapon. A minus -4 penalty, even with two attacks can be crippling. I frankly would even recommend doing this even if you did add your attack modifier, to get you into the positives, but a -1,-1 is at least livable, and you would improve. It's your decision, that's just my advice, and I would like other players to let me know if any of this information is false.
Otherwise, it's fine. I am not too familiar with Lough, but she seems like a fine Deity. I am surprised Kardos would choose a nature deity over a war god like Corellon, but he's your character.