Vallan X said: baldhermit said: Hey Vallan, Mashallah had to do a work thing, so taking over trying to get you a correct sheet. Attack work space: I'm on board with the half level and the ability, but where does the prof score of 1 and the enhancement score of 2 come from? Also, why is expertise listed as 0? Damage score: here enhancement is set at 1, and the damage bonus from the Orb set under misc. I agree and understand this. All your chosen powers are hard to read as they show no origin. For example Dishearten (At Will level 1), Arcane Mutterings (Utility level 2).. So as I understand it, you picked Disheart and Memory Hole at level 1, and Id Insinuation at level 3. Id Insinuation is a level 3 power, but you have it listed in the box as a level 1. Second Wind is a feature all characters have Infernal Wrath is a racial feature Distract and Send Thoughts a result of your Telepathy focus Ravening Thought your level 1 daily Summon Ebony Stinger your level 5 daily Arcane Mutterings the U2 as mentioned earlier I do not know what Shadowdance Cloud is, though I am guessing you intended to write the word armor there, which would make it an item power I do not know what Acrobat's Leap is, though just like the previous I assume some creative liberty with names and you are refering to the item Acrobat Boots, which makes this too an item power Hellfire Heir, as I also wrote on November 28th, is not a theme. Do you wish to pick a Theme ? Please give us some clue as to the character, its traits, appearance, mannerism. It does not have to be a novella, but we want to know you have an idea on how to roleplay this character. Lastly, you bough a ton of stuff you will likely see no use for in our adventures, while at the same time ignoring the recommendation to buy a neck item. (also, a high level implement would increase your chances to hit, reduce you chances to miss). Please repost when you've had a chance to look at the attack work space, whether my interpretation of your powers is correct, whether you want a theme and if so which, and had a chance to clue us in on your characters personality. If you have more questions or wish to participate in the Guild chat, look up one of the DMs on skype I think I've fixed everything to your liking.... I listed the powers like Infernal Wrath, Distract, and Send Thoughts like this to make it easier for me to read/reference quickly. I sold back a bunch of the useless rituals and upgraded my orb to a better one instead, and added a necklace. That shouldn't interfere with wearing the one I wrote into my backstory, correct? couldn't find a theme to my liking... <a href="http://www.myth-weavers.com/sheet.html#id=987516" rel="nofollow">http://www.myth-weavers.com/sheet.html#id=987516</a> I like this photo as a representation of my character If a DM gives you specific feedback don't just say "fixed it all" and carry on. It is far far far more helpful to directly address each of their concerns and explain what you fixed. It makes it much easier for us to see where you went wrong and where you continue to go wrong. I'm trying to figure out how/if you are inputing your superior implement into your attack and damage workspace. It should give you +2 damage on psychic and +1 to hit will. Both of those should be listed as misc bonuses. You also need to put two things with different bonuses in your attack and damage workspaces. I'd make it dishearten and melee basic attack. Also you did not address or fix bald's note that your expertise should be included in your workspace. Take Orb Expertise over Implement Expertise (Orb). Its strictly speaking better in every way with no downside. Your skill bonuses confuse me. You should have a +2 to untrained from your feat, plus your bonuses from being a tiefling. For example you have +3 to Athletics, +5 to Bluff and +0 to Diplomacy all in a row. The Bluff is likely correct (+2 Racial, +1 Background, +2 Feat) but the other two do not look correct. Please list out your bonuses to skills. You have listed a +2 enhancement bonus to your attacks and you are using a +1 implement, fix that. Please break down where you are spending your money. A cursory look at your items shows you are over budget before getting to your rituals at all and the rituals come at a decent price. Just your items, by my math, come out to 4550 which is 50gp over budget, plus the eleven rituals you purchased/have as well as a good amount of mundane items that put you further over budget. You still did not label your powers appropriately (watch the video if confused or check on the census for any of my characters). It looks as if you are missing a second level utility. I really like the backstory. Look forward to giving you reasons to RP it at table. Please post when you have fixed things (by addressing the issues mentioned by name rather than saying 'fixed').
